WDescription: we have to choose a story for a eportfolio sample I chose this one from camp. I chose this one because it's about haunted rooms.
"2 minutes reading only". "What!!" "Okay 0 minutes". "What!""okay 0 minutes" "what!" "bye". Click,"aaaaaaahhhhhhhhhh! a flame". "Go,to,sleep". I reached out to touch the flame... whew its only a shadow, of what, a chill ran up my spine, the closest tree was a long way away. My heart raced around the nerves screaming a ghost flame, a, ghost, flame. Then it appeared something glistening, a dot. I collapsed, I was knocked out, terrified cold, nothing would ever wake me, ever. There were explanations but they don't make sense take the one about the dot for example: there are printed dots on the curtains, but the dot would be black??
Feedback feedforward:I think u did good with detail but I think u should do more writing in your Description:trey
Evaluation: I think I did good in the writing next time I will follow treys advice.